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Comic 932 - A Girl Named Dorothy, Page 10

23rd Jul 2020, 11:00 PM in 25. A Girl Named Dorothy
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Author Notes:

23rd Jul 2020, 11:00 PM
Martin F.
Not an ideal page to comment on while tired since I think there's probably a lot to say about it but let's see here...

Think does bare noting that the dialogue on this one was tweaked a few times from how it was originally written. Originally Alex was more emphasizing wanting a date on when this could be undone in the last panel, but Adam commented that the way it was written made it sound more like a repeated demand to go on a date with someone so I tweaked it to be a bit to make the point more directly clear. Beyond that eventually I realized Alex probably has some level of familiarity with the idea of the identity crisis going on at the moment, so I tweaked the dialogue in the earlier panels to be more direct in how Alex approached the matter and more understanding of the implications of it.

This is where the conversation kind of moves away from the gender identity issue for now though - that is something I do want to go a lot more into ASAP, but in the moment the matter of Dorothy is more pressing and is what kind of takes center stage from here. I think on a lot of things when it comes to this whole Dorothy situation

I do think it bares noting how much more the focus with Alex has always been on trying to live as Dorothy than trying to live as a girl and how there's never really been a huge amount in the way of dysphoria. Was trying to emphasize that here while also making it clear that it is still something of a consideration - in this particular instance thinking in depth about the situation with Dorothy is causing a disconnect, pretty much the inverse of how being referred to as a boy was intruding on the fantasy for Alex under other circumstances. We'll be exploring that dichotomy a lot more going forward.
23rd Jul 2020, 11:14 PM
Adam C.
OOO! Blue Blood Heroes shout-out! ^^ Alex mentions wanting to throw some support to the Blues kids due to their having just gone public but not being able to due to currently not being "himself." ...... For the record, due to the wonky time-skip that happened before the current Blues arc, this conversation Alex is having is happening relatively soon after the Marvelous Man fight, before all the kids re-united. Which is hilarious because I'd love to hear what Alex's support of the Blues kids would sound like given what's happening in their most recent chapter.

Bit of a gush on that comment, but really appreciated it when Martin threw in that shout-out. ^^

We've begun advertising the comics again (Hi, all you newcomers) and part of that was because THIS chapter is a really good one to try and advertise over. Alex's dysphoria coming about now is a great way of drawing back to the core concept of the comic; the bodyswap. Added to by his demand to have an exact end-date to get his body back. It's a great moment where we return to the comics' central conflict and explore it. ^^

Again, trying to use more dynamic, animated posing here, especially with the dramatic close-up in the fourth panel and Alex's "I don't give no shits" glare in the final one. Just been trying to keep in the groove of it.

Sort of a hard one for me to comment on, since it's mostly dialog, but still very fun to draw and see in action.

I guess I could point out that the raindrops on the window change color. ^^() The sky isn't a uniform black so I kept having to make the rain ligher/darker as I went along to make it show up. Is it noticeable?

Comments:

24th Jul 2020, 12:12 AM
Wow, just wow.
24th Jul 2020, 4:52 PM
I'm...really disliking this so far...is that the desired reaction?
24th Jul 2020, 6:19 PM
Martin F.
Well, appreciate being direct at least. Any particular aspect?
27th Jul 2020, 4:26 AM
I don't mean it's bad as in badly written...it's fine in that regard, it's just...everyone feels a little off...like it's taking a bitter turn I'm not used to, like you want us to despise this character