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Comic 934 - A Girl Named Dorothy, Page 12

30th Jul 2020, 11:00 PM in 25. A Girl Named Dorothy
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Author Notes:

30th Jul 2020, 11:00 PM
Adam C.
I'm sort of tired so not the best time to comment on this, but love the effect on this. Martin said in the script that Alex should be close to tears in the sixth panel close-up. I wound up throwing actual tears into his eyes, worried I was going to far, and Martin threw it up further by making his face red from the extreme anger going on. I think this is a moment where you really see just how helpless Alex feels about being trapped in this position, and is fed up with Sarabeth manipulating him like nothing.

What I love though is that Sarabeth doesn't shy away from it. Sareena clings to the idea of being a good person and just prefers to not think about her complicity in the matter, Sarabeth understands that she's doing something unambiguously amoral. She's already thought about the consequences of her actions and understands it totally. She's totally okay using two people as pawns.

Also, I tried to improve the panels themselves here. There's a lot less space between the panels and they're a more uniform size. Minor touch but makes the page nicer to look at. Sometimes it can be distracting when the pages don't size up.
30th Jul 2020, 11:13 PM
Martin F.
This page is the end of this sequence - felt like a good capstone to it, really showing Alex getting especially worked up and then having Sarabeth coldly shoot his objection down.

I do feel like the character kind of needed something like this - there is kind of an unavoidable fog over Sarabeth with doing this and I do think it was pretty well time for it to really come to a head. We'll see her again in this chapter but for now, yeah, back to the stuff with Dorothy's family from this point.

Also we get a mention of the seed again - that's a subject that hasn't come up in awhile, though we've had some speculation on it lately on our Discord server (by the way you can join that at discord.gg/yP9ECdN if you're interested, we'd love to hear from more of you) - but I do feel like was appropriate to nudge at here, both in regards to Sarabeth's plan for it and the fact that Sareena presently possesses it. I don't think Sareena really fully understands the context of what Alex is talking about on it here, but it is kind of enough of an allusion to it to be head-tilting for her.

Thoughts on the gradual reddening in the face effect by the way? Kind of something done on a whim with this page but I feel like it really helps put over the emotion of it.


30th Jul 2020, 11:40 PM
The effects with the face looks fine to me, wonder what will happen next.
2nd Aug 2020, 6:33 PM
Martin F.
Heh, glad you think so.
31st Jul 2020, 10:02 AM
Now I'm coming around to it...and I want to give Alex a hug.
2nd Aug 2020, 6:33 PM
Martin F.
Good to hear you're coming around a bit. And I guess at least he has Jodie around to provide hugs?